Thanks for your suggestions! I did not agree with every one of them, but some were really enlighting. I need to post more works in progress here.
Something is still bugging me. Oh well, I'll take a stab at it tommorow.
I added the glasses to the sketch because in the backstory she was his high school teacher. I am aiming for that hot teacher thing.
Umm... I don't get that sink. Or is that just a random faucet sticking out of the wall?
ReplyDeletedid you read the long comment on your previous post? Could any of that be what's bugging you?
Enjoying the tousled hair.
Seriously. I just noticed you mentioned our(the fans) suggestions from the previous post. I suck at reading your updates. Sorry.
DeleteI'll go punish myself now.[Jumping barefoot on the nail mat sounds fun]
Wish I had a teacher like that...
ReplyDeleteGotta turn that self-criticism down a few clicks, especially with the revision to trap-chef there it looks more realistic...and quite beautiful in my opinion.
Trap-chef....huh...I used to have long hair like that you know. *awkward fantasies*
DeleteMy husband used to have long hair like that... *remembers living some fantasies*
DeleteThough, I am not a bossfutalady. I *AM* a bosslady. :3
Boy, does this scenario seem... so... familiar.
Huh! Okay, since I might have a bit of a unique viewpoint here ya go!
The expressions look fine! As a bosslady (-dick), I often bite my lip when taking what I what - or any other time. I bite my lip a lot... I honestly think her expression is spot-on. It's his eyes that kind of get me - I'm not exactly sure where he's looking. Are they rolled back? Or he is looking back at her, in shock? Or would he be staring blankly ahead, vision blurred as his mind focuses on other senses? In the sketch, he seemed focused on her... in this version, his iris/pupil is less noticeable.
I'm glad you brought back the messy hair and the little additions make the background come alive. Beautiful work so far. Regardless of all the nit-picks, you are such an inspiration!
Fuck haters, this thing is BEAUTIFUL.
ReplyDeleteHaters? Where?
DeleteLovely, but i miss the short jeans he was wearing, makes it look more spontaneous.
ReplyDeleteI dunno, I'd like to think Trap-chef was cooking with only an apron...that's kinda sexy.
Deletemmm, nah i still like the idea of spontaneous surprise buttsex better :P.
DeleteAlso i like the hot for teacher thing, and maybe hes a former student of hers?
If you're looking for a critique... well, I'm no artist, but the angle of his butt/dick area seems a bit off, at least compared to the angle at which his torso is positioned, as well as the angle from which she's fucking him. It seems like, for a natural position, at least, and with the viewing angle that we've got, we shouldn't be able to see his other butt cheek (and that his legs and dick should be angled accordingly). It's like their hips are making a "V" shape that opens towards the audience.
ReplyDeleteI think the whole hip area (his) may be a little disproportionately small as well; I don't mean his butt needs to be bigger, but that area just feels a little small for his body.
I think when you lost the strong outline from the rough sketch for the bottom of her boobs at the left side of the picture (next to her right arm), that's made her right boob (stage left) seem a little shapeless. The line for the bottom of her lip seems either a little out of place or perhaps superfluous with the way she's biting it. Her waist seems a little too narrow for too long--the general shape in the first rough sketch was more natural, I think. And the outline for the left side of his chest (stage right, above the neckline of the apron) seems a bit scrawny compared to what we're seeing of the more visible side.
That's about all that jumps out at me (though I have to agree with one of the other commenters, I miss the shorts--super-mini cut-offs on a trap = MMMMM). That said, it does look fantastic. I really do love how you draw people biting their lower lip, which is not something I normally notice in art.
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DeleteShould be "[...] *that made her right boob [...]" and "Her waist seems a little too narrow *or too long [...]"
It could be the traps left leg. To reiterate Ehhh....'s comment, it doesn't seem anatomically possible for him to be able to twist his torso that far to the right (or have a back that long), while his hips are turned the way they are.
ReplyDeleteThe only thing that irks me with this one is the way that cock enters his pucker. It just seems to low. Like it's entering a pussy. Other than that, I love it.
ReplyDeleteThat's cos it IS enterting her vagina.
DeleteThey are both dickgirls, her tits are just smaller.
You're in denial; Closet-boy.
Delete[Time to expand your sexual preferences]
Someone is defensive about their fictitious dickgirl art.
DeleteIsn't it open to the viewer to interpret? Why u mad?
I really can't change your mind, and that is a shame; since I'm 100% certain the sun does not circle the earth...
DeleteA small mole near the end of the upper lip of anyone would beautify them much more...
ReplyDeleteWith hair on it.
ReplyDeleteMaybe both of them should be oldschool witches too? You know, with those huge noses and stuff.
so YOU can troll , but other can't ...
Deleteplease , you can create a blog an choose alls rules on it , but this is the Incase blog , that's cool that you get involved in this one, maybe even more than any other, but let others express themselves and do not insult them. thank you.
and yes I have a poor grammar, English is not my native language. please, don't be a fundamentalist of spelling
Cool, I don't have English as my native language either :)
DeleteYour grammar does have some errors, but I understand every word you're saying, and for that I'll give you a 8.5/10. *[Remember Capital Letters]*
And thanks for replying.
How'd you know I was joking? :O Are you a witch too?
I do admit to joking in a condescending manner. But, that gives you permission to retaliate against me, and I'd love it if you did.
[I enjoy arguments; learn to ignore me, or have fun arguing with me]
not that kind of mole just a small dot like in the first two steps near the eye of the victim
ReplyDeleteVictim? That makes the situation so much worse than it really is <:O
DeleteI do agree that it makes particular girls prettier, but not her and him.