I still did not write the dialogue for this one! Why am I doing this to myself? It would be so much easier to write the dialogue first, then match their expressions to it. Doing it the other way around is just insane.
There's only so many things you can do with words. Especially when it comes to something like this, in the back of your mind you've probably got everything already figured out, you just don't know it.
Honestly, this page seems pretty self-explanatory, even without words. I wouldn't worry too much about it, your design is strong enough that even without words, the story is already fairly apparent.
The leaving of the bag amuses me. I hadn't noticed that until just now.
Yeah, I would say this pretty much explains itself. If you REALLY wanted to add dialog, you could probably add it where the futa girl turns around and/or when the blond girl (she is blonde right?) goes back to waiting. Other than that I dont see any need for dialog.
First off, great job on this page so far. Secondly, don't force yourself to add dialogue to everything. It's something you use to advance a scene or give more information that isn't apparent without it being said. So in the case of this page I would leave it without any words because people can clearly see everything that's going on and from the first to last panel it moves very quickly so you wouldn't really need to speed it up anymore with words.
In short... perfect the way it is, don't fuck it up with something you don't feel like writing anyway.
There's only so many things you can do with words. Especially when it comes to something like this, in the back of your mind you've probably got everything already figured out, you just don't know it.
ReplyDeleteHonestly, this page seems pretty self-explanatory, even without words.
ReplyDeleteI wouldn't worry too much about it, your design is strong enough that even without words, the story is already fairly apparent.
The leaving of the bag amuses me. I hadn't noticed that until just now.
Yeah, I would say this pretty much explains itself. If you REALLY wanted to add dialog, you could probably add it where the futa girl turns around and/or when the blond girl (she is blonde right?) goes back to waiting. Other than that I dont see any need for dialog.
ReplyDeleteMind bubbles, that could explain the expressions
ReplyDeleteFirst off, great job on this page so far. Secondly, don't force yourself to add dialogue to everything. It's something you use to advance a scene or give more information that isn't apparent without it being said. So in the case of this page I would leave it without any words because people can clearly see everything that's going on and from the first to last panel it moves very quickly so you wouldn't really need to speed it up anymore with words.
ReplyDeleteIn short... perfect the way it is, don't fuck it up with something you don't feel like writing anyway.