Aaaaand done!
It took me almost 3 months to draw these 7 pages but alas they are complete. Fucking, finally.
I have some mixed feelings about this comic.
On one hand I don't like how it came out. I know some of you like it. but I don't. I don't like the story, characters, piss me off, not to mention that their faces vary wildly inbetween frames. Eh. If I were not the one to draw it, I would not give it a second look. Or maye I would, what do I know.
But on the other hand I accomplished everything I wanted with this comic. I wanted to make that first hard step into drawing comics, learn if I can stick to a longer project, see what it takes to draw a comic and experiment with different workflows and techniques. I did all that and more.
So I guess, in the end it's all good? I knew going into this that I probably won't like the end result. I drew this comic to learn something, and I did exactly that.
And I am not too hard on myself, I just have high standards. Shut up.
Now I will take a break from drawing comics for a while. I have some stuff planned for this blog for the next 2-3 weeks. After that I'll probably start designing characters for the next comic. Gonna do this right this time.
A journey begins with one step.
ReplyDeleteOur lessons come from the journey, not the destination.
ReplyDeleteFor what it's worth, I thought it was really hot.
ReplyDeleteYou're a very gifted artist and your work is evolving quite nicely - always look to improve, but be happy with what you've done too.
I'm really looking forward to any future work of yours!
Grammatical Error in panel 4: ''Stoke'', should be ''Stroke''
ReplyDeleteWrong: [Are you having a stoke?]
Correct: [Are you having a stroke?]
Grammatical Error in panel 3: ''speclial'', should be ''special''
ReplyDeleteWrong: [Consider it a speclial one time offer.]
Correct: [Consider it a special one-time offer.]
Also, instead of [''stroke''], try using [''seizure''] It's more common for people her age to have seizures than strokes.
ReplyDeleteI also recommend using: [''Will you be back again'']; because it sounds more natural in that particular context.
I loved this comic, Great job!
dont care what you think, i think its awsome
ReplyDeleteTell you what, you can hate on your own comic as much as you like so long as you put together a sweet desktop of these sexy babes at 1920 x 1200. In any event I thought the comic itself was quite well done.
ReplyDeleteBest comic I've read in a while. Really entertaining. I wonder if the process becomes easier over time?
ReplyDeleteNothing wrong with having high standards for the finished product, but despite the fact that you are your own worst critic, you're still a fantastic artist that probably has more talent with just your pinky finger than some of us have with both hands (Not sure if that makes sense).
ReplyDeleteI'm glad to see this project done though, disappointed that you're not happy with it, but your fanbase and I seem to like it (insert joke about that being half the battle.........G. I. JOoooooE~).
ReplyDeleteThank you for not giving up on the comic and taking it to it's conclusion. Definitely looking forward to the follow up to this one.
I still don't get, why she ran away?
ReplyDeleteHaven't you experienced jerking off, and then being disgusted/feeling ashamed after climaxing?
DeleteYeah, I know that feeling all to well. Especially when I catch a reflection of myself on my laptop screen.
Deletewell,i think it turned out quite gloriously, imperfections aside (on a long project its much easier to see your on mistakes, or at least most of them). I personally thought the story seemed cute.
ReplyDeleteYou are wrong, m'dear, this is a lovely comic, and very well drawn. True, there is room for improvement, but I think it would be weirder if there wasn't, given that it's your first. And whatever you say, the characters were remarkably consistent from the end of page 2 onwards.
ReplyDeleteWhen I first read this, I was a little sad about her running out like that. I felt much better once I noticed the second to last panel with her presently-left-behind satchel. Thanks for your efforts!
ReplyDeletethe comic wasn't too bad. But you are right some improvements and learning curves.
ReplyDeleteSo on the next comic are you going to continue from this one with better backround for the story and characters?
Please continue the story! There wasnt much of it but whart we've seen was interesting so far and the art is also very good.
ReplyDeleteBrosef, the story was so @$£€"¤%"%! hot that along with the pictures, I'm surprised I haven't jizzed in my pants a gazillion times already. So always consider that as well. Too bad you're killing it though, I was kinda hoping it would last longer, new fan. Anyways, great work sticking it out and all, and great work on the comic.
ReplyDeleteA WANT A CONTINUE OF THIS COMIC!!11
ReplyDeleteIs it me, or was she singing "Bitch Betta Have My Money" the ICP cover? If she was, WHOOP WHOOP
ReplyDeletei found this comic thru futanariobsession. now i have a new bookmark in my browser. awesome
ReplyDeleteAwesome page, but what happened to the lipstick tube in the last panel?
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I thought it was vary well done.
ReplyDeleteIn the spirit of constructive criticism I would like to comment on a few things.
First of all it was an interesting idea to make the panels non rectangular during the orgasming scene. However, why does this page layout style persist onto the last page. It makes the comic less unified and doesn't represent the experience of male post orgasm. Also I thought your earlier arrangements where more interesting. Try panning back out a little more later on, especially post-orgasm. I feel like the combination of these things made your panel compositions feel cramped on the last couple pages. Also there are other ways to display climax like complicated page layouts and exaggerated perspective. I also think you should have left out the reference to the pimp on the last page. I liked it much better when I imagined her as an entrepreneur. Sex trafficking is a serious issue in the united states and a major downer. I think it should be left out of erotica or at least dealt with in a very serious manner (although I doubt that is even possible).
Negativity aside, I thought your layout for page 3 was amazing!I thought you did a good job of adding depth to the characters.WE NEED MORE OF THIS IN THE EROTIC PARADIGM! I suggest you take a look at Maka Maka, Trans Venus, and Carma Sutra by Manara. They really show what can be done with erotic comics.Over all, I am certainly a fan and this is a promising first attempt.
interesting point of view, I had the same feeling about Manara and that he could bring in personal enrichment
Deletebut I'd say to me it was just due to the fact that all the authors of erotic drawings should learn from Manara ^ ^
but there is clearly something more.
Found this on g.e-hentai.org . Must say, that chick with the black hair is the hottest chick I have ever seen in a comic.
ReplyDeletewell I you didn't like it but I thought it came out great, and I didn't notice the faces varying. So excited for the next one.
ReplyDeleteI hope this is only the beginning with these two.
ReplyDeleteI truly liked the comic. However, I was disappointed with how quickly it ended. But, i feel like you can take the main character here and bring her into a few more stories where she acts on spontaneous urges, just like this one, and leaves the person flustered and wanting more.
ReplyDelete-zer0 @ Newfapchan
.. she forgot her bag. She has to come get it back, InCase! :c Continue the Comic! <3
ReplyDeleteAnd after reading your note, how dare you! :c It's a brilliant comic and I love it! Please continue it.. she has to come back to get her bag! (I don't think anyone noticed she forgot it. ;3 )
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