Even more inacurate environment studies!
Page #1 finished (unless I made some new spelling errors):
I tried to trim down the dialogue a bit, and make Sam less whiny. Also, yes I do love giving my characters non gender specific names.
I also did the first draft of the dialogue for the second page.
It's also pretty wordy. But the next 4 pages will have considerably less talking and more action, so I think that's fine. Gotta establish them characters first.